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(Frage) beantwortet  | | Datum: | 13:20 Do 26.02.2009 | | Autor: | Dinker |
Hallo
Ich hab nochmals etwas zum korrigieren. Hoffe es ist nicht zuviel
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With the help of the different characters you will "receiv"e more information about the settings and where the persons live.
oder With helping of the different.......
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Further I will illustrate the importance of the places by using the example of the American dream.
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The 1920's are known as "the golden age." A time when money was very abundant and also a time of drinking, partying, jazz.
A lot of people dealing with stock or earn much money in the oil industry, sometimes legal, otherwise illegal.
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Of course Middlewest is also important, but more "as/in" a passive role.
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at a later date = zu einem späteren Zeitpunkt. Gibt es da nichts besser klingenderes?
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You can see this fact obviously between Gatsby and Daisy. I will give more detail information about it later.
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Further the East Egg citizen are rooted with their place, because they live there for generation, meanwhile the West Egg people came recently from the different directions.
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So maybe the West Egg citizens are an allegory of himself.
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To see it. from a different perspective the burning old soil can also be a symbol for a new beginning and new hope, for what it will come next.
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.....Because New York is for the most characters another place and symbol different things, therefore it has more than one function.
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Valley of ashes represents modern society and the destruction that has caused. Its a place where the waste people are
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To Gatsby mansion, Daisy and Tom Buchanan mansion and George and Myrtle garage, "it comes later on" - sollte heissen, dass ich später etwas dazu erzählen werde.
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Unfortunately its necessary to told something about the traits of the persons although this isnt my task.
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At the worst case they lose their home, social contact and end in the valley of ashes, where they have no future. They have to pay for the management mistakes, which is a certain unfair fact.
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Sie sind nicht interessiert im Rampenlicht zu stehen.
Ich weiss nicht wie man das passend sagen könnte
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These are the people we dont know really much because they prefer to live withdrawn.
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New York City is a place, which has several functions: To escape from the life, to have fun and be reckless.
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And finally I will try to accompany a link with the social classes nowadays.
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Can someone read at page.... "from" line .... "to" .....
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I will enumerate several characters and mention the meaning of New York City for them
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They live above a gas station in the valley of the Ashes
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They have all been uprooted and moved in searching of some better destiny
Vielen besten Dank für deine Bemühungen
Gruss Dinker
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> Hallo
> Ich hab nochmals etwas zum korrigieren. Hoffe es ist nicht
> zuviel
Hallo,
versieh doch Deine Sätze mit fortlaufenden Nummern.
Wenn die Betreffs von den Antwortenden z.B. mit "zu 1. und 5" versehen werden, sieht jeder gleich, was noch unbeantwortet ist, und es können sich verschiedene Leute zu verschiedenen Zeiten darüberhermachen.
Gruß v. Angela
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(Mitteilung) Reaktion unnötig  | | Datum: | 13:50 Do 26.02.2009 | | Autor: | Dinker |
Hallo Angela
Besten Dank für deinen Hinweis.
Werde es gleich machen...
Gruss Dinker
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(Antwort) fertig  | | Datum: | 14:50 Do 26.02.2009 | | Autor: | mmhkt |
Guten Tag,
um mal den Anfang zu machen - hier einige Vorschläge:
Zu 1.
"With the help" würde ich stehen lassen.
Statt "receive" ginge auch "get".
Zu 7.
Further the East Egg citizens are rooted with their place, because they live there for generations, meanwhile the West Egg people recently came from the different directions.
Zu 13.
Unfortunately its necessary to told tell something about the traits of the persons although this isnt my task.
(Aber warum unglücklicherweise? - Vielleicht besser: "zum Verständnis" oder "zum besseren Verständnis".
Deine Formulierung erweckt den Eindruck, als würden die Zuhörer deines Vortrages darunter zu leiden haben, dass Du etwas ausholen musst.)
Zu 15.
Sie sind nicht interessiert im Rampenlicht zu stehen.
They are not interested in standing in the spotlight.
Schönen Gruß
mmhkt
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(Antwort) fertig | | Datum: | 21:25 Do 26.02.2009 | | Autor: | mmhkt |
Guten Abend,
noch eine kleine Portion:
zu Nr. 9
To see it from a different perspective, the burning old soil can also be a symbol for a new beginning and new hope, for what it will come next.
zu Nr. 10
Because New York is for the most characters another place and symbol different things, therefore it has more than one function.
Vorschlag: Because for most of the characters New York is another place and a symbol for different things,...
oder: Because for most of the characters New York is another place, symbolizing different things,...
Schönen Abend
mmhkt
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(Mitteilung) Reaktion unnötig | | Datum: | 21:57 Do 26.02.2009 | | Autor: | Dinker |
Hallo mmhkt
Besten Dank für deine Bemühungen
Gruss Dinker
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(Mitteilung) Reaktion unnötig | | Datum: | 14:31 Fr 27.02.2009 | | Autor: | Josef |
Hallo Dinker,
> Nr. 5
> at a later date = zu einem späteren Zeitpunkt. Gibt es da
> nichts besser klingenderes?
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at a future date
Viele Grüße
Josef
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(Mitteilung) Reaktion unnötig | | Datum: | 14:59 Fr 27.02.2009 | | Autor: | Josef |
Hallo Dinker,
> Nr. 19
> Can someone read at page.... "from" line .... "to" .....
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Mein Vorschlag:
Can someone read on page ... from line ... to ...
Viele Grüße
Josef
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Hallo
Ich hab nochmals etwas zum korrigieren. Hoffe es ist nicht zuviel
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With the help of the different characters you will "receiv"e more information about the settings and where the persons live.
oder With helping of the different.......
hier With helping the different...
oder with the aid of the...
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Further I will illustrate the importance of the places by using AN example of the American dream.
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The 1920's are known as "the golden age." A time when money was very abundant and also a time of drinking, partying, jazz.
A lot of people DEALT with stock or EARNED much money in the oil industry, sometimes legal, otherwise illegal.
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Of course Middlewest is also important, but more AS a passive role.
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at a later date = zu einem späteren Zeitpunkt. Gibt es da nichts besser klingenderes? Later, würde ich nur sagen... oder After... such and such..
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OBVIOUSLY, you can see this fact between Gatsby and Daisy. I will give more detail information about it later.
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Further the East Egg citizenS are rooted with their place, because they live for generation there , meanwhile the West Egg people came recently from the different directions.
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So maybe the West Egg citizens are an allegory of himself.
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Nr. 9
To see it. from a different perspective the burning old soil can also be a symbol for a new beginning and new hope, for what it will come next.
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Nr. 10
.....Because New York is for the most characters another place and symbol different things, therefore it has more than one function.
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Valley of ashes represents modern society and the destruction that has caused.. ja was denn??? Its a place where the waste people are
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To Gatsby mansion, Daisy and Tom Buchanan mansion and George and Myrtle garage, "it comes later on" - sollte heissen, dass ich später etwas dazu erzählen werde. I will mention it later, or It will be mentioned later on.
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Unfortunately its necessary to TELL !!! something about the traits of the persons although this isnt my task.
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At the worst case they LOST their home, social contact and end in the valley of ashes where they have no future. They have to pay for the management mistakes which is a certain unfair fact. bei relativsätze kein KOMMA!
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Sie sind nicht interessiert im Rampenlicht zu stehen.
Ich weiss nicht wie man das passend sagen könnt. There are not interested in being famous.
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These are the people we dont know really much because they prefer to live withdrawn.
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New York City is a place, which has several functions: To escape from the life: to have fun and be reckless.
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And finally I will try to accompany a link with the social classes nowadays.
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Can someone read at page.... "from" line .... "to" .....
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I will enumerate several characters and mention the meaning of New York City for them
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They live above a gas station in the valley of the Ashes
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They have all been uprooted and moved in LOOKING FOR A better destiny
Ok, that's all. I hope I could help you, I marked almost all mistakes in CAPITAL LETTERS! Ok, but you should still correct it with your notes;)
Take Care
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