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(Frage) beantwortet  | | Datum: | 10:31 Di 02.06.2009 | | Autor: | Dinker |
Guten Morgen
Etwas zum korrigieren
Mustapha Mond is the most influential person in brave new World. He has particular privileges and can do what he wants. He is able to understand dissident, which deviate from the norm. Therefore he has beside John the second independent person. As a young man he was a successful scientist. Because his research was a danger for the stability of the system, he was enforced to give up his scientist activity. He is aware, that the system is fraud to the human and the people of Brave new world arent really happy and that the system features inhuman aspects.
Bernard inner features stand in the contradiction to the system. Based on his appearance he isnt accepted and feels himself as outcast. But with John he sees the chance to varnish his reputation.
Danke
Gruss Dinker
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(Antwort) fertig  | | Datum: | 16:41 Di 02.06.2009 | | Autor: | Amano |
Mustapha Mond is the most influential person in brave new World.
He has particular privileges and can do what he wants.
He holds exceptional privileges...
He is able to understand dissident, which deviate from the norm.
...dissidents, who...
Therefore he has beside John the second independent person.
Hence, his is a second independent person next to John.
As a young man he was a successful scientist.
Because his research was a danger for the stability of the system, he was enforced to give up his scientist activity.
...danger to...
...he was forced...
He is aware, that the system is fraud to the human and the people of Brave new world arent really happy and that the system features inhuman aspects.
Der Satz ist nicht gut formuliert und sollte komplett umgestaltet werden.
Vorschlaege: mankind oder human being
inhuman system.
Bernard inner features stand in the contradiction to the system.
Was sind 'inner features'?
...in contradiction to...
Based on his appearance he isnt accepted and feels himself as outcast.
Appearance: meinst du vielleicht (thought) approach
But with John he sees the chance to varnish his reputation.
... to improve his reputation.
LG
Amano
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(Mitteilung) Reaktion unnötig  | | Datum: | 19:31 Di 02.06.2009 | | Autor: | Dinker |
Hallo Amano
Vielen Dank für deine vorgenommene Korrekturen an meinen englischen Texten.
Ich werde morgen über die Texte schauen um zu schauen, wo meine Fehlerquellen liegen.
Bei Unklarheiten werde ich mich wieder melden.
Danke
Gruss Dinker
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(Mitteilung) Reaktion unnötig | | Datum: | 19:51 Di 02.06.2009 | | Autor: | Amano |
Hi Dinker,
Okay, dann bis morgen.
Hier hab ich mich vertippt:
Hence, his is a second independent person next to John.
Hence, he is a ....
LG
Amano
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