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(Frage) beantwortet  | | Datum: | 10:53 Di 02.06.2009 | | Autor: | Dinker |
Hallo
Wäre sehr dankbar um Korrektur
In this futuristic Brave new world are all enlightened elements eradicated. Apart from Mustapha Mond no person in the novel is free. Because they are produced artificially for a predestinated task and arent able to change their behavior and conditions in the course of their life. And people which has still an independent thoughts and deviate from the norm has the choice to adapt to the standard or to be banished.
Therefore one of the best-know principles of this ideology, to serves itself
..own sanity (sich seines eigenen verstandes zu bedienen) isnt possible and undesirable.
In this system its impossible to develop his own personality and to act based on common sense.
The people believe in all what the government teaches and arent willingly and able to question the facts to think critically.
Vielen Dank
gruss Dinker
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(Antwort) fertig  | | Datum: | 12:08 Di 02.06.2009 | | Autor: | Amano |
In this futuristic Brave new world are all enlightened elements eradicated.
Du ueberrumpelst mich ein wenig mit diesem Satz. Hast du viellicht eine Einleitung zu Brave New World?
In the futuristic novel Brave new world all enlightened elements were eradicated.
Apart from Mustapha Mond no person in the novel is free. Because they are produced artificially for a predestinated task and arent able to change their behavior and conditions in the course of their life.
Den zweiten Satz solltest du umstellen, im Deutschen funktioniert es auch nicht, wenn man zwei Nebensaetze aneinanderreiht und der Hauptsatz fehlt.
Vorschlag:
Apart from Mustapha Mond no person in the novel is free.
Indivuals are reproduced artificially in order to fulfill a pre-desinated task. Hence, they are neither able to change their behaviour nor the conditions in their course of life.
And people which has still an independent thoughts and deviate from the norm has the choice to adapt to the standard or to be banished.
Those people who still have independent thougths and therfore deviate from the norm have the choice to adapt to or to be banished otherwise.
Therefore one of the best-know principles of this ideology, to serves itself
..own sanity (sich seines eigenen verstandes zu bedienen) isnt possible and undesirable.
Welche Ideologie meinst du hier mit 'this ideology'? Sicher nicht die von Brave New World!?
relying on one's own way of thinking
In this system its impossible to develop his own personality and to act based on common sense.
In er Schriftsprache solltest du 'it is' ausschreiben.
His own... ist ein wenig sexistisch, da du das maennliche Geschlecht vorziehst, du kannst dich neutral ausdruecken mit 'one' oder 'they' bzw. 'one's' oder 'their'. Es kommt allerdings auf den Lehrer an, an englischen Schulen bzw. in der GCSE- oder A-Level-Pruefung wuerde man dir das nicht durchgehen lassen.
The people believe in all what the government teaches and arent willingly and able to question the facts to think critically.
The people believe in all what the government teaches them and they aren't willing or able to question their statements or to think critically.
Hope this helps
LG
Amano
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